This has been a long time coming – a collaboration with Blaga from Broken Sparkles, who is absolutely one of the best poets and writers I’ve ever had the pleasure of reading and working with. Not only that, she’s amazingly sweet and kindhearted, so it’s always a pleasure to talk to her. It was a great experience to work on this poem with her, and I hope that in the future we’ll get to work on a collaboration again.
So this is what we came up with, and I think the root of this poem is something a lot of people can relate to. Enjoy!
Forlornness
By Blaga Todorova and Cherlyn Cochrane
You’re leaving again -
where to this time?
Sahara or Sinai?
Lost, buried within the dunes,
expecting your tormented ego
to blend with the rays of wild sun.
Your tortured soul belongs
to the Egyptian ruins;
you find comfort in the lonely winds
chasing mirages,
desolating the desert,
with beige ashes as your company.
Go! Don’t turn back to see me
trembling in the reflection
of your empty eyes.
Find your way to a hasty escape
in mysterious lands faraway.
Go! And don’t expect atonement…
Crumble away, become forgotten -
lost in the sands of time
like your precious Pyramids.
Leave again – and soon too
this heartache burning inside
will be but an ancient memory.

Also, I love the title!!!!
Wow, this was such a beautiful poem you both collaborated on. Congratulations to both of you!!! I love how the poem had this sense that it was talking directly to me, especially at the points where it “Go” was written. I just felt like I was the lone reception of what was written, it was a really wonderful sensation. So amazing, you both are such talented writers!!!!
What? Lol
Thanks though!
Hooray! Bravo … You’ve done well with this. A fine collaboration, Cherlyn. I love the images presented, the sadness, and the excuisite beauty.
I have been tied up with company and then redecorating, so I haven’t been good about visit – so far behind – and posts, but am working on catch up this week. Hooray!
Thanking of you. Keep safe and happy dear girl.
Virtual hugs,
Jamie
I’m glad you liked it! I was also pleased with how it turned out
And it’s all good – I’ve been busy, and I’m super behind on everyone’s posts, so no worries.
Thanks for stopping by
How did you do this? Did you talk over the phone, or through email, or what? Haha. I’m envious, I want someone to do a collab with me also.
Anyway I’m trying to put up a novel by posting per chapter in installment at my blog, haha. I hope you have read the first two that I have written.
Let me know what ya think!
Thanks, dear Cherlyn.
We did it over Facebook/Email, one would write a bit, then the other would write a bit. Blaga is really easy to work with, so there was no “power control” or anything, it just sort of happened. We started it a long time ago, but you know how life is – gets in the way of everything.
I think I’ve read the first part of your novel, which was great – I’m hoping to really catch up on blogs this week, so I should be able to get through to your stuff, I’m excited!
Thanks for stopping by
!
This is an awesome collaboration … well done Blaga & Cherlyn !
Thanks
Well done US!
Thanks for the kind words Cherlyn! It is a definite repeat working with you! Hugs!
Way to go us!
We rock! Hugs!
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this poem is good well done keep up writing .from kevin in hampshire uk
Thank you!